l Cuts in education
In my opinion,education is so important and it is the cornerstone of national development. If a country cuts education, the overall national quality will drop. And then the level of people's knowledge and the country's development will not be coordinate. Resulted from that,the speed of national development will slow down ,even stop. So,we should fight against cuts in education.
l Nuclear power plant in my town
As we all know,on March 11th, 2011, an earthquake hit Japan. It led to the leakage of nuclear and polluted the environment heavily. What is more, it is also harmful to people's health. If there is a nuclear power plant in my town and the nuclear leaks, it will damage my hometown, which is full of my valuable memories, and do harm to the people which I really treasure. That is why I will protest about nuclear power plant in my town.
In the first part,the last sentence "So,we should fight against cuts in education" has a punctuation wrong and the comma should be dropped. And in the second part, the example is very proper. But I think the sentence "it will damage my hometown, which is full of my valuable memories" I think is not celar that can be changed to "it will damage my hometown, in which there is full of my valuable memories".
ReplyDeleteThank you very much. The suggestion is very helpful for me.
Deletesome small grammer mistakes:"If a country cuts education"
ReplyDelete"resulted from that"----in the first para
"on March 11th(eleventh)"-----the second para
do you agree with me? *_*
I cannot agree more. THank you for your corrections. I think I am a little bit careless about these small mistakes.
DeleteI agree with your second idea. The nuclear is dangerous and bad for our health! Be away from the neclear!
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